Once upon a time a totally original guy called Rodney Rowdy piper, he lives in a tire hut. His hobies include eating grass throwing bark at cars and try to chew metal. Rodneys mum live's in a straw hut, they were so poor they could't even aford a block of choclate. One day he was strolling down the street eating grass, then he found a lotto ticket it had not been used up yet so he strached it out. His results were 9! 9! 9! ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh he was screeming all over town"I won the lotto" he was excited. he looked at how much he won and it was 32million dollars!!! The following day he bought a limo,manchen, a life time stack of chocolate bars! and he also bought a lifetime servant. He was living the dream. He had a happily ever after.
I think your story is great. You have a great introduction to the story. You used great detail throughout and I could easily picture in my mind what was happening. Well done.
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